this is the time cradled by the wind,
cuddled by the blossom,
filled with the white candy floss from the beautiful sky,
it is such a beauty,
all in this little jar,
of a beautiful kingdom,
surrounded by beautiful spring,
candy stars,
with colourful bubbles in the air,
what a beauty,
all in a jar,
but what is filling in the gem of all gems?
cuddled by the blossom,
filled with the white candy floss from the beautiful sky,
it is such a beauty,
all in this little jar,
of a beautiful kingdom,
surrounded by beautiful spring,
candy stars,
with colourful bubbles in the air,
what a beauty,
all in a jar,
but what is filling in the gem of all gems?
posted by Melyong at 9:59 PM
1 Comments:
Again, it's nice to use such happy words such as 'blossom', 'white candy floss' and 'colourful bubbles' but it brings no relevance to most readers. In fact, you seem to be trying to point out something beautiful. Problem is, readers CAN'T see what you're trying to point out.
Too much happy words only you understand. May this poem keep you happy, Mel. ^.^
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